The Man Next Door

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He always had a mysterious grin on his face. Living in an apartment in Mumbai, all alone and barely walking out of his space in daylight made his neighbours suspicious about him.

Once, the IT executive who lived right opposite to our mystery man’s apartment peeped in to spy what’s happening inside and unfortunately he was caught by our angry young man who never liked someone trying to disturb his privacy. Beat him almost to death. And then no one has seen this IT guy ever around the place; he was gone.

Every weekend a bunch of guys rush into his apartment with beer bottles in hands and ‘The Hotel California’ in their lips. They shout and scream in joy. That’s when people realize there is this young mysteriously odd man lives in their flat and they should be bother about such a neighbor who could be a danger someday.

And that’s when our beautiful girl who was very stubborn, decided to buy the apartment the IT guy left. She shifted her space from Indore to Mumbai as part of her Journalist job. She heard much about the man who was her neighbor but she has never seen him and was not even interested too.

But one day they met. They collided, their eyes caught each other’s and she smiled. He shouted.

“Can’t you see? Idiot.”

“I’m sorry” she was never used to say that though.

When he was about to walk away, she stood in front of him blocking his way to just simply smile and say “ I’m Natasha and you are?”

He didn’t reply.

Days passed. Natasha used to work late night and he always used to go out at midnight. No one knew where he was going. But they saw each other every night. She smiles and he never pays a heed.

One day; he was sitting on his couch in his living room and suddenly Natasha fall on to the floor through the main door which wasn’t locked. He ran to her saying “What the fuck?”

Natasha was unconscious. She was breathing heavily and moved her hands to convey to him that she had asthma and she couldn’t breathe. Even though he was much angry to be having such a trouble on his head took her in his arms and ran to nearby hospital. She was admitted and he took care of her until she was discharged.

They came back to their places. She took leave from her job. He continued his routine; going out at midnight and partying at the weekends with his peer group. She obviously had a crush on him as every girl would have on her savior. All she wanted was to talk to him but she never got a chance until one day one of his friends, may be, and showed up on a midnight in his apartment. But as usually he was out and this guy left, leaving an envelope on the door lock. Natasha, who was looking for an opportunity to bump on him, took the envelope and waited for our man to arrive. Nearly at 2 in the morning he came back. Natasha ran to him and handover the envelope.

“Someone left this on your door. I took care of it” She smiled.

“Who the hell are you ha?” he shouted at her for bothering about his stuffs and smashed the door on her face.

Natasha was upset. She walked here and there in her room. She couldn’t sleep and didn’t even go for job. That afternoon she heard a knock on her door. Surprisingly it was him with a feeble smile on his face.

“I’m sorry” he said and it was clear that he said sorry for first time ever in his life.

“I was a bit disturbed. That’s why…” he scratched his head.

“That’s okay. Come in and suit yourself friend” she blushed.

He walked in, looked around and then to her face with a smile he never gave to anyone but her. They became friends. And he started changing with her presence around. Other people in the apartment started seeing him in the daylight and that too with a broad smiling face. They all were surprised to see him in such a joy and positivity. She often visited his place; sometimes on the weekend parties and sometimes alone. When they were alone, she would sing him songs and dance along with him. She wished for a kiss but he never crossed the limits. They went out; to the beach where they played with the sand and ate ice-creams like kids; to the theatres  to watch SRK movies and scream in joy together like friends; to the sunset where they would hold their hands and she would rest her head on his shoulder like lovers.

That’s how they became to each other. He was hers; she thought that was forever. Until she fall sick like hell again. Asthma caught her. She had him beside, every minute holding her hands and giving her strength to come back.

“It’s hard for her this time” doctors said.

He came to her and sat beside the bed. He saw her trying to breathe through the oxygen mask they gave her to survive. He held her hand.

“I’m sorry baby. I’m helpless”

He knew, even though her eyes were closed she is listening him; every word of him. He went close to her ears and whispered something only she heard. Slowly she opened her eyes and looked at his face in terror. He put his hands in the jacket he wore and took out the envelope she handed over to him that night. And took out a photograph and showed it to her. Facing to him was written ‘Kill her, you have 25 days time’

But it was easy on the 13th day. All he had to do was to take off the oxygen mask and walk away with the mysterious grin on his face.

~UmA~


15 thoughts on “The Man Next Door

  1. Oh my God !!!!!!!!! I am on edge, in the end did he….. ? Was there not a moment of true feelings ?? I am a hopeless romantic 🙂

  2. hmmm… Uma first good effort on writing a story. I liked the incompleteness of it, to put it…it was a simple write up about the mysterious man but it lacked the build up elements, if you built it up it would have been smooth, this one is scatered, showing this is your trial in writing stories. For ex, that man could have been sppokier and you could have made the girl sweeter(:… and taken attension away from him, like she was a smart and nosey journalist who could have turned by as a detective(: to check this guy out and you could have made this guy fall in love with the girl… and the part where the boys party singing, you could have instilled some fear where there was evil and he ran away but it would have been you see him imagination… I liked the crude incompleteness because I used to write like you… even I have written some stories until recently for vocabulary asignement I can show you some… I think you can do more work on this… it is really simple…but a attempt at dark story is commendable…you made it quite usuall…crush and attraction and girl coming over the man and trusting him and all that…also though it is personal avoid swear words(:…though it is natural people use it, you got to set example that you can make a story cool even without it… this guy could have been good as well as in the man Boo in the Kill a mocking bird story, or he could have been like Edward the vampire in twilight or he could have been intelligent Sherlock Holmes and the girl tries to know about him coming to his house as a client and maybe Watson gets attracted to her…several possibilities… but here again one wisdom prevails… girls like fairytails and the idea of falling in love…and that may make them fragile as in the case of her…never trust or submit yourself to some stranger so easily(:…and there is irony, the letter the girl handed over to her was the note instructing him to kill her(:… that was good…surprise and horror…overall I give you 4 out of 10 for the story…for horror, darkness, slight romance…but more word on creating atmosphere, instilling realism, also bring out a sence of humour somewhere… I tell you what watch Oceans 11, 12 and 13…write a story after that… I is really good watch to write a mystirious story sweetly…good day then

    1. Thank you so much for this valuable comment. More like a guide. It is actually a rough thing written for a short film work which I thought share it here. But I appreciate you for observing my writings more closely and giving out suggest helping comments 🙂 Thanks a lot maria. I will consider everything you have mentioned and I will re-write it for this blog 🙂

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